
Prayer smoke ascended into the grey sky. He hadn’t expected the rain and it was difficult to keep the fire. Yet his plan worked of bundling dried leaves and twigs in plastic before he left.
As the sun set, the rain fell harder then suddenly stopped. Night songs began, including tree frogs and an owl. Was it worth it to come out here?
He had no choice really but to reinvent himself. So many fragmented pieces. He gathered up what he could and sought the wilderness.
Was it wrong to not care about his culture? Breaking off a piece of dried spinach, he realized it probably was. He refused to stand in line anymore though, walking into the abyss.
It was the dawn that brought deliverance. He peeled back his wet sleeping bag like layers of skin, knowing he would have a different name today.
The sun would bring a new life…..and the healing would begin.
As he stood on top of the mountain.
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Note: This is about a First Nations man seeking a vision as part of his culture, and seeking healing for himself.
Wow. We can all use a new beginning and healing at times. I found this powerful.
Thank you Molly for your wonderful comments! What a blessing. Peace and wonderful blessings to you.
I very much enjoyed reading this.
Thank you Sarah! Your comment is very encouraging. Peace and wonderful blessings.
You’re very welcome.
Wonderful. I’ve encountered a few “dawns of deliverance” in my life, of which I am truly grateful.
Thank you Lois! Your comments are beautiful and encouraging. Peace and wonderful blessings to you.
This is so incredible
Thank you More! Peace and beautiful blessings my friend.
Many blessings to you and your family
Wow! You write so well, Nico. Will there be a sequel to this? I hope so. Loved it.
Thank you Jeff! What a wonderful thing to say! Well I wasn’t planning on it, but we’ll see. Thanks again. Peace and wonderful blessings my friend.
You’re most welcome, Nico. Always! Sounds good! Thank you. Peace and blessings my friend.
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This makes me ask questions.
Thank you so much! That may be a good thing. If you have questions for me, let me know! Peace and wonderful blessings to you.
Thank you.
I guess I want to know why he is there and how he will get his new name. My imagination is proberly working. Thank you for writing so well. We often enjoy making our own beginnings and endings.
Your questions are perfectly valid. First I am a person of faith but this is not Christian blog. It’s a creative writing blog. I often write about nature healing us because it does. And people need healing. Some Christians are more overt with their faith and have Scriptures and little sermons.
Anyway I love being out in the woods, and we have some mountains close to us. Many of my poems are meditative. I also add a little Native American/First Nations flavor to some of my work. The prayer smoke and a new name would be from these types of traditions. Basically in a nutshell he wants/needs a new beginning. I’m leaving the rest up to the reader to interpret. As in art there can be different interpretations of the piece according to who is looking at it. Blessings!
Ah that is lovely. I have just seen the high fences around Calais and my mind was still primed by my feeling for refugees. Your story is so different. Thank you.
Blessings to you and yours.
Oh this is so beautiful!!
Thank you Pragalbha for your encouraging comment! Peace and beautiful blessings.
Wow 🖤
Thank you so much Li Ahn! And welcome to my blog. Peace and wonderful blessings to you.
very much enjoyed reading this
Thank you so much! And welcome to my blog. Peace and wonderful blessings to you.
This is a beautiful write, Nico. I love it.
Thank you Jeff for your wonderful comments! Peace and beautiful blessings my friend.
You’re most welcome, Nico. Always! Thank you, and to you, my friend.
Great piece.
Thank you Molly! I love writing this way. Peace and beautiful blessings to you all.
You know, I love this kind of story you write. There is so much deep inner wisdom and faith in this man. Still, he needs courage but he knows steadfastly where his path leads. I love this!
Thank you Erika for your great comments! What a blessing to receive this today. Peace and wonderful holiday blessings my friend.
I am happy to hear that it makes you feel good to read my comment about something that made me feel good in the first place. Mutual valuable inspiration. Thank you, Nico.
Blessings.
Your poem sings hope, Nico
In friendship
Michel
Thank you Michel! Your comments are a blessing. Peace and wonderful blessings to you my friend.
Wishing you and yours a very Merry Christmas, Nicodemas, and a happy and healthy New Year!
Thank you Anna! Merry Christmas and Happy New Year! Peace and beautiful blessings.
Beautiful 💙❤
Thank you D.A.! I love writing this way. Peace my friend and beautiful blessings.
It’s a pleasure always 💖💛
Blessings D.A.!
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